Tuesday, January 12, 2010

First semester portfolio – piece I’d like to revise

The piece id like to revise is my haiku, it’s ok I just think I could do better. maybe make it longing or lik,e in a story.

Leaves fall
All I see are leaves
They fall down to the unknown
And give the Earth color

1 comment:

  1. Cassie, i really like the poem. I think it is good the way it is.

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